Soft wind brings a whiff
Cologne, sweat, and Chinese lo mein.
Tax season pressures.
Children crave: "Daddy!"
Two more weeks until he's back
Wives stay calm- knowing
That when it ends, rewarded
A sleek, black Lexus.
*This is an experiment with the traditional 5-7-5 haiku.
Hi! It was interesting how you told a story from three different points of view in such concise words and stanzas. I liked the imagery of the lines "cologne, sweat, and chinese lo mein" and "a sleek black Lexus." You definitely took the season aspect of a haiku and turned it around to mean a different kind of season. The second haiku lacked some of the imagery of the other two- the line "two more weeks until he's back" sounded a little flat. Really cool idea and nice haikus!
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